The Zhou Dynasty should have not gone into war with the Shang dynasty, mainly because they would have been good allies. The Zhou dynasty did not need to expand their land much, and conquer more land makes it so you have heavier responsibilities in the future when you have to defend the region. But so far the Zhou dynasty seems to be doing just fine with these extra responsiblities.
The Zhou dynasty has become a very powerful dynasty, but also a very greedy one. Although their interests are for the good of the people, they are making many enemies in the process. It was a good idea to divide the power with there allies during the war; this will make it so there is a smaller chance that the friendly dynasties will rebel for more power.
Overall the Zhou dynasties victory was a key step in the rise of there dynasty. Although Zhou and Shang would have been good allies, the weak should be destroyed and the strong should flourish.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
Your article headline and lead tell me that your article is going to be about why the Zhou should not have gone to war with the Shang, but then your article actually talks about good things the Zhou has done. You need to rewrite so that your argument that you make at the beginning is supported with details throughout the article.
ReplyDeleteThe other major problem here is the misuse of "there," "their," and "they're." Review your notes on this and make appropriate changes.
You need to restructure this article quite a bit in order to make it a successful editorial.